Comments on: Chapter 34 http://srsuleski.com by Sarah R. Suleski Thu, 28 Aug 2008 17:30:53 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5.1 By: Sarah Suleski http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-1076 Sarah Suleski Sun, 11 May 2008 01:15:44 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-1076 <p>Actually it IS a little funny . . . not ha ha, but ironic, because when I was writing it I did consider taking it out — not for the pop culture nature but because I thought it might be too funny for that point in the story.</p> Actually it IS a little funny . . . not ha ha, but ironic, because when I was writing it I did consider taking it out — not for the pop culture nature but because I thought it might be too funny for that point in the story.

]]> By: The Cloaked Stranger http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-1074 The Cloaked Stranger Sun, 11 May 2008 01:00:23 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-1074 <p>It's not a big deal — I think it's just funny that it occurred to me at all.</p> It’s not a big deal — I think it’s just funny that it occurred to me at all.

]]> By: Sarah Suleski http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-1066 Sarah Suleski Fri, 09 May 2008 23:24:29 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-1066 <p>I never really gave it that much thought, actually — I mean I wasn't avoiding them purposefully.</p> <p>There are a few more culture allusions here and there — such as McDonalds (Liseli thinks of it, sarcastically, as a classier place than the BH.  Bitterness aside she is right, though, and that's why I chose a fictional place.  I wanted it to be some smalltown, local dump rather than part of a national chain that would be concerned about keeping up a standard).  And then there's the part where Russ likens the garden in Elharan to something he'd see on PBS.</p> <p>There are probably a couple others, but they're few and far between.  More of a reflection of the fact that they spend 95% of the story in otherworlds than anything else I think.</p> I never really gave it that much thought, actually — I mean I wasn’t avoiding them purposefully.

There are a few more culture allusions here and there — such as McDonalds (Liseli thinks of it, sarcastically, as a classier place than the BH.  Bitterness aside she is right, though, and that’s why I chose a fictional place.  I wanted it to be some smalltown, local dump rather than part of a national chain that would be concerned about keeping up a standard).  And then there’s the part where Russ likens the garden in Elharan to something he’d see on PBS.

There are probably a couple others, but they’re few and far between.  More of a reflection of the fact that they spend 95% of the story in otherworlds than anything else I think.

]]> By: The Cloaked Stranger http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-1055 The Cloaked Stranger Fri, 09 May 2008 11:58:43 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-1055 <p>So it wasn't a dream, and Liseli is pretty bad-ass. </p> <p>Funny thing:  In the movie the Usual Suspects, they never talk about popular culture even once, until a cop mentions the Incredible Hulk.  The director Brian Singer, in the commentary, expressed that he was happy for the non-references, and was almost sorry he mentioned the Hulk at all, except that it worked for the scene.</p> <p>Well, until you mentioned the WWE, this story never referred to anything pop cultural — even the restaurant Russ and Liseli worked in was fictional.  It stood totally on its own.  I just thought it was funny that I even noticed.  I kind of liked that it stood by itself.</p> <p>(this coming from someone who filled No Man an Island with allusions throughout literature and the Bible to work in a theme on the way culture influences us)</p> So it wasn’t a dream, and Liseli is pretty bad-ass. 

Funny thing:  In the movie the Usual Suspects, they never talk about popular culture even once, until a cop mentions the Incredible Hulk.  The director Brian Singer, in the commentary, expressed that he was happy for the non-references, and was almost sorry he mentioned the Hulk at all, except that it worked for the scene.

Well, until you mentioned the WWE, this story never referred to anything pop cultural — even the restaurant Russ and Liseli worked in was fictional.  It stood totally on its own.  I just thought it was funny that I even noticed.  I kind of liked that it stood by itself.

(this coming from someone who filled No Man an Island with allusions throughout literature and the Bible to work in a theme on the way culture influences us)

]]> By: Trygve http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-575 Trygve Wed, 09 Apr 2008 14:16:59 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-575 <p>Ah, i see what you mean now :)</p> Ah, i see what you mean now :)

]]> By: Sarah Suleski http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-515 Sarah Suleski Tue, 08 Apr 2008 23:11:16 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-515 <p>Heh, Donna beat me to the explanation. :)</p> <p>Thanks, I'm looking into Lulu.  Been working on formatting the document.  One of the less fun but very necessary parts of writing.</p> Heh, Donna beat me to the explanation. :)

Thanks, I’m looking into Lulu.  Been working on formatting the document.  One of the less fun but very necessary parts of writing.

]]> By: Sarah Suleski http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-513 Sarah Suleski Tue, 08 Apr 2008 23:09:33 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-513 <p>@Lora — Thanks so much for your comment, I had a shitty day and this brought a smile to my face!  Yay!</p> <p>@Trygve — <em>I had always imagined him as a pretty large fellow. No idea why.</em></p> <p>He's a powerful guy, being King and a Key to boot.  I think he has an aura of largeness.  At any rate, I think it's fitting that you imagined him larger.  Russ did, until that moment.</p> <p><em>Isn’t it supposed to be “his eyes” or “Russ’ eyes”?</em></p> <p>When you smile for realses, it shows in the eyes.  An insincere, halfhearted, or fake smile won't have the same effect.  That's what I meant by that, anyway.</p> @Lora — Thanks so much for your comment, I had a shitty day and this brought a smile to my face!  Yay!

@Trygve —
I had always imagined him as a pretty large fellow. No idea why.

He’s a powerful guy, being King and a Key to boot.  I think he has an aura of largeness.  At any rate, I think it’s fitting that you imagined him larger.  Russ did, until that moment.

Isn’t it supposed to be “his eyes” or “Russ’ eyes”?

When you smile for realses, it shows in the eyes.  An insincere, halfhearted, or fake smile won’t have the same effect.  That’s what I meant by that, anyway.

]]> By: Donna Sirianni http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-512 Donna Sirianni Tue, 08 Apr 2008 23:09:09 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-512 <p>@Trygve, not necessarily.  A smile doesn't have to reach the smiler's eyes, especially if it's faint.  It usually means it's a weak or undeserved smile.  In this instance, I think it's just weak because of what had happened around them.  There wasn't too much room for happiness.</p> <p>At the same time, it doesn't have to be literal, either.  A person can smile broadly but it can usually be seen in their eyes that it's disingenuous.  Either way, it's not grammatically incorrect or anything.</p> <p>Sarah, if you decide to put this through Lulu, I'll certainly buy a copy!  Beats printing it out.</p> @Trygve, not necessarily.  A smile doesn’t have to reach the smiler’s eyes, especially if it’s faint.  It usually means it’s a weak or undeserved smile.  In this instance, I think it’s just weak because of what had happened around them.  There wasn’t too much room for happiness.

At the same time, it doesn’t have to be literal, either.  A person can smile broadly but it can usually be seen in their eyes that it’s disingenuous.  Either way, it’s not grammatically incorrect or anything.

Sarah, if you decide to put this through Lulu, I’ll certainly buy a copy!  Beats printing it out.

]]> By: Trygve http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-490 Trygve Tue, 08 Apr 2008 18:16:14 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-490 <p>And Leeton. Perhaps if she explained exactly what the monster did, Leeton wouldn't be that keen on killing her . . . That being said, I was really surprised by Leeton's size. I had always imagined him as a pretty large fellow. No idea why.</p> <p>Oh, and I found a weird sentence: "she said with a faint smile that didn’t reach her eyes." Is this correct? Isn't it supposed to be "his eyes" or "Russ' eyes"?</p> And Leeton. Perhaps if she explained exactly what the monster did, Leeton wouldn’t be that keen on killing her . . . That being said, I was really surprised by Leeton’s size. I had always imagined him as a pretty large fellow. No idea why.

Oh, and I found a weird sentence:
“she said with a faint smile that didn’t reach her eyes.” Is this correct? Isn’t it supposed to be “his eyes” or “Russ’ eyes”?

]]> By: Lora http://srsuleski.com/alisiyad/chapter-34/#comment-483 Lora Tue, 08 Apr 2008 16:46:40 +0000 http://srsuleski.com/?page_id=171#comment-483 <p>Just finished reading the archives of this story. I've been utterly captivated with it since I started it on Sunday evening and I cannot wait for the rest! Your characters are believable, the story is well-paced and intense, and the suspense is killing me! Alisiyad is on my favorites list now, and I can't wait for the next update.</p> <p>-Lora</p> Just finished reading the archives of this story. I’ve been utterly captivated with it since I started it on Sunday evening and I cannot wait for the rest! Your characters are believable, the story is well-paced and intense, and the suspense is killing me! Alisiyad is on my favorites list now, and I can’t wait for the next update.

-Lora

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