Comments on: Chapter 5 Part 2

By: Donna

Donna — Sun, 05 Oct 2008 13:08:00 +0000

^^^
Regarding that last catch, it should be “were”—

“What were just trees in the day were mysterious in the dark, like whisperings between unseen things in the sky.”

Kunama — Fri, 15 Aug 2008 20:49:36 +0000

"She thought she knew what is was."

is vs it

"and there was a tiny wooded area beyond the yard where nighttime animals roamed in an out"

an vs and

"what was just trees in the day was mysterious in the dark, like whisperings between unseen things in the sky"

I'm not sure what it is, but that sentence just seems awkward.

Sarah — Wed, 16 Jul 2008 02:42:44 +0000

Awwwww. Well you’d be a little creepy and socially inept if you had to hang around all undead and ghostly too.

Sam — Tue, 15 Jul 2008 15:03:55 +0000

River Children are nasty.

Trygve — Sat, 17 May 2008 14:41:04 +0000

p>Elly needs to tell Liseli about her encounter. Geez, this family has too many secrets :4a7d3d609129a9296bf7ac0608c2097

Sonja — Sat, 17 May 2008 13:44:36 +0000

I feel bad for the Lost One.

And she is creepy