Comments on: Sweet Sixteen, Chapter 3

By: Sarah

Sarah — Wed, 16 Jul 2008 02:54:54 +0000

Never seen Bambi?!?!?! It’s . . . not actually that good. But hey.

By: Sam

Sam — Tue, 15 Jul 2008 15:46:20 +0000

Hey, it's spelled enamou- Oh wait. That's right. Americans spell it differently. I fully support a chapter name change to Twitterpated, because although I've never seen Bambi, that word sounds too great not to use.

Also: I'm glad Elly seems more . . . human now.

By: pfors

pfors — Sun, 15 Jun 2008 17:55:09 +0000

“Elly smiled a little, glad that Hollie’s attention span could skip from one thought to another so easily.”
Doesn’t quite seem like a correct use of ‘attention span’, might want to drop the span.

By: The Cloaked Stranger

The Cloaked Stranger — Sat, 07 Jun 2008 23:11:56 +0000

That's okay. Allan T. Michaels applied it to himself in a comment on Diggory, and I vote we all start calling him "Bambi."

(plus, I love Queen of Seven, Sarah — maybe more than Alisiyad)

By: Sonja

Sonja — Sat, 07 Jun 2008 01:22:51 +0000

I dunno what it is . . . I’ve only seen Bambie once or twice when I was little . . . but I’ve never ever forgotten that word. I just want to hug it to pieces.

By: Sarah

Sarah — Sat, 07 Jun 2008 01:17:09 +0000

I have half a mind to change the title from “Enamored” to “Twitterpatted” now

Thanks for the typo catch.

@ Ananta — how right you are.

By: Sonja

Sonja — Sat, 07 Jun 2008 00:38:30 +0000

I loved this chapter for some reason. Elly and Hollie were sweet together. Twitterpated Ellie. Hehe.

Think I caught a typo though:

And here they’d said around gabbing, while the rest of the family was waiting for them

Thinking sat instead said?

By: Ananta

Ananta — Fri, 06 Jun 2008 22:18:45 +0000

Hmm . . . I'm starting to think that maybe ALL Russ and Liseli's children have supernatural abilities of some sort. That, added to the fact that Russ and Liseli are probably immortal makes me think that The River had more of an effect on them than they realized.

Love the story Sarah!